David Guinness

Very depressing story, Dreamy, yes. I read Family Happiness before that. Tolstoy's not much on jolly, cheerful exhibitions, is he? ;) Anyway, fine piece. My only suggestion is to check ...

Fun, Snoink. ;D

Because Alighieri regularly visited Paris, Texas. Of course.

Nice job, Snoink. Interesting approach to poetry. I have no complaint, though I agree with Chevy about the end of it. I'd like to hear this vocally performed some day.

It's more concise. Much better.

*backs away from Afyr* Pretty good limerick. Really creepy- (chills and all) -but pretty good. As Snoink said, I would go back through and test the phrasing. Most of it ...

This is seriously genius. I think it's more like genius masquerading as non-genius masquerading as genius... ':\ If you know what I mean.

If your Egg McMuffin fell apart, I suppose...

Thank you, very, very (repeat "very" infinitely) much, smaur. A few of the diction points you mentioned I have fixed in my draft, waiting on my desk for submission. But ...

Great story. Although there's quite a bit of dialog, as Nate said, it's done very well. The "readability" is excellent. Does the name Caraidus come from cariadus , "beloved" ?

Good poem, xanthan gum. I don't see any real issues with it. The diction and syntax seem well chosen. I really like some of the word pairings. I think you ...

I really like your use of the last line, after mentioning it once before.

It is a good poem. I see no issues other than what xanthan gum addressed. The topic is good, and you have approached it well.

I like the line spacing! Nicely written, Brad.

322 words. Quite short. I hadn't any more to say. :) Or at that point, I thought I hadn't. Our assignment was to write a persuasive essay, at least 300 ...